Look at other pledges to compare. Both the Pledge of Allegiance and the Hippocratic Oath are far shorter, but seem to get their point across. The Declaration of Independence is much shorter also. Although I didn't do an exact word count, it appears that the Magna Carta wasn't very ambitious at all when compared with the Republican Pledge to America.
The Conscious Conservative Pledge
I, as a Conscious Conservative, pledge to work to return to the fiscally sound US dollar, to balance the federal budget, to bring all United States troops home to protect the United States border, to abolish the income tax, to return all rights and responsibilities of child rearing to parents, and to leave all decisions on moral issues to individuals who are free to follow their own religious preference.
That sure seems shorter, easier to understand and more effective. I'm open to suggestions. Feel free to add any in the comments below. Just don't make any that are doublespeak, unclear or just plain insane.
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